bigwordsandsharpedges: “ The native Maori people of New Zealand have tattooed their faces for centuries. They had a complex warrior culture before the arrival of Europeans, and suffered under early colonialism, but have experienced a cultural revival.
aligned with Common Core Writing Standards 1 & 2 - I would switch the roof and foundation. I think it makes more sense to build from the bottom up. The topic sentence should be the foundation and the closing sentence should protect your paragraph.
His laughter rumbled like thunder as he struggled to rise. & matters not what happens to me. My Dark Master, Lord of the Night arises, and there is nothing you can do to stop him.& ~Wendy Hamlet Rise of the Phoenix) (Fire Drake by sansyu)